Happiness

[Over the top]

Hello, correct this to me, Please.​

We need a long time to prove that others and things don't give us happiness. Most people believe that happiness is always related to marriage and it is the only way to rescue them from loneliness. But it has been found that those who were lonely before marriage are still feel so alone and who were sad before marriage are continuing to live life of sorrow after it. The marriage shock for many persons belongs to this wrong concept. It is the illusion that makes many people pursue it, flittering from marriage to marriage and from relationship to other, seeking a perfect partner who could bring pleasure and joy to their lives but they will discover lately that this ideal partner could exist only in their minds.​

In short, happiness can only made by us. Perhaps some people surrounding us contribute to make us happy for awhile but if we are incapable to create happiness inside us, no marriage, nor children, friends, family or jobs can concede it.​

Thank you ​

 

[Kai13]

We need a long time to prove that others and things (1) don't give us happiness. Most people believe that happiness is always related to marriage and it is the only way to rescue them from loneliness. But it has been found that those who were lonely before marriage are still feel (2) so alone and who were sad (3) before marriage are continuing to live life of sorrow after it. The marriage shock for many persons belongs to this wrong concept. It is the illusion that makes many people pursue it, flittering from marriage to marriage and from relationship to other, seeking a perfect partner who could bring pleasure and joy to their lives but they will discover lately that this ideal partner could exist only in their minds.



In short, happiness can only BE made by us. Perhaps some people surrounding us contribute to make us happy for awhile but if we are incapable to create happiness inside us, no marriage, nor children, friends, family or jobs can concede it.
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Okay then, let's see...

1- others and things makes the sentence look a bit strange, don't get me wrong, but I dunno why.

2 - still feelling alone

3 - those who were sad

Done, I belive that's all, but, am not sure.​

 

[Anglika]

Hello, correct this to me, Please.​

We need a long time to prove that other people and things don't give us happiness. Most people believe that happiness is always related to marriage and it is the only way to rescue them from loneliness. But it has been found that those who were lonely before marriage are still feel so after marriage and those who were sad before marriage continue to live a life of sorrow after it. The shock that can follow marriage for many persons comes from/derives from to this wrong concept. It is the illusion of happiness that makes many people pursue it, flitting from marriage to marriage and from relationship to relationship, seeking a perfect partner to bring pleasure and joy to their lives, only to discover too late that this ideal partner exists only in their minds.​

In short, happiness can only made by ourselves. Perhaps some people make us happy for a while but if we are incapable of creating happiness inside ourselves, neitherconcede marriage, nor children, friends, family or jobs can achieve it.​

Thank you ​

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