Hello Great Teachers! I'm back with more questions, thxz!^^

[Help Wanted]

Hello my dearest teachers,

Hope you are all well and enjoying life to the fullest! I am back for your great advice on Run-On sentences. Please advice, thanks soooo much.

How can I repair the following run-on sentences to make them better, thx

A)Tina climbed the steps to the high diving board she went slowly and looked like she was thinking about something serious she was because nobody knew that she could not swim.

B) This one requires a shift in time and place, thz soooo much
Gloria met Fiona at the shopping centre in the morning to play games at the new mall and in the evening Gloria and Fiona sold raffle tickets in their school for the cheer group.

Thanks sooo much for advicing, teachers! Help Wanted

 

[Tdol]

Hi- Does this help?

A)Tina climbed the steps to the high diving board. She went slowly and looked like she was thinking about something serious; she was because nobody knew that she could not swim.



Gloria met Fiona at the shopping centre in the morning to play games at the new mall, and in the evening they sold raffle tickets in their school for the cheer group.
;-)

 

[Tdol]

BTW- How are you? It's been quite a while.;-)

 

[Help Wanted]

Hello teacher Tdol,

Thanks for your great advice and I am very well, thanks. I have tried repairing the two Run-on sentences. Would you be able to check if they are correct? Thanks sooooo much in advance and always with much appreciation for taking the time to help us out.


A1)
Tina climbed up to the high diving board slowly. She looked like she was thinking about something serious because nobody knew that she could not swim.
or

A2)
Tina climbed up to the high diving board slowly. She looked worried / looked like she was worrying because nobody knew that she could not swim.


B) This one requires a <shift> in time and place.

In the morning, Gloria met Fiona at the shopping centre to play games at the new mall and in the evening Gloria and Fiona sold raffle tickets for the cheer groupin their school.

What do you think of the above amendment to the run-on sentences? Please advice, teacher Tdol! Help Wanted ^^