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Sorry for posting silly questions again as I really need help for the passage below. Thanks again for helping! T_T

I still remember when you went into the departure hall at the airport, my eyes became red and the tears shed from my eyes! Every time when I think of this, I always laugh because I think I am very silly. I knew you would come back, but I still cry.

Would anyone help proof-read the above passage? Thanks
 

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I still remember when you went into the departure hall at the airport, my eyes became red and the tears shed from my eyes! Every time when I think of this, I always laugh because I think I am very silly. I knew you would come back, but I still cry.

Try:

  • I still remember when you went into the departure hall at the airport. My eyes became red and the tears flowed from my eyes! Every time I think of that I laugh, because I think I was very silly. I knew you would come back, but I cried anyhow.

(The word still can be ambiguous, since it has more than one meaning.)

What do you think?

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Thank you! ^o^

Thank you very very much, RonBee! ^o^
 
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