[Grammar] Help with grammar

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piaseq

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Hello,

I have to send and email describing certain issue in a website.
Timeline should be as follows:
1. log in.
2. navigate to some certain place on the website (submenu)
3. wait till session expires (automatic logout)
4. click anything and get redirected to login screen
5. login and the page should return to exactly the same place (but it fails)

My sentence:
"If the session expires, you'll see login screen as soon as you click on anything. But the webpage won't take you back to where you've been before the session had expired"

Is it correct?
 

Mr_Ben

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Hello,

I have to send and email describing certain issue in a website.
Timeline should be as follows:
1. log in.
2. navigate to some certain place on the website (submenu)
3. wait till session expires (automatic logout)
4. click anything and get redirected to login screen
5. login and the page should return to exactly the same place (but it fails)

My sentence:
"If the session expires, you should see the login screen as soon as you click on anything. But the webpage doesn't take you back to where you were before the session expired"

Is it correct?

Yours was very good but I think these changes make it a little clearer. :)
 

SoothingDave

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Change "webpage" to "system" or "software" or "server." "The system doesn't take you back to where you were before the session expired." Or "...to the page you were on when the session expired."
 

piaseq

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I've changed the subject to "a webpage" as the name of my application could only make everybody wonder what this was all about. Email was sent, everybody is happy :) Thank you for help.
 
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