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What is wrong w/this sentence?

The Earth moves around the sun similarly the moon orbits around the Earth.

Is it just that it needs a semicolon b/wn sun and simlarly?

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Hi and welcome.
What is wrong w/this sentence?

The Earth moves around the sun similarly the moon orbits around the Earth.

Is it just that it needs a semicolon b/wn sun and simlarly? That's certainly the most obvious fault, but there are others:
1...Sun and Moon should also be capitalized.
2...I would use the more specific verb "orbits" first.
3..."orbits around" is redundant.
4... There should be a comma after "similarly".

The Earth orbits the Sun; similarly, the Moon (orbits)(moves around) the Earth.
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