Her enthusiasm, creativity, words of encouragement and guidance

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Could you please check this sentence?
Her enthusiasm, creativity, words of encouragement and guidance are what separate her from other instructors in the gym.
 

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It's fine, except I would say at the gym. Also, you might want to say the other instructors.

(American English.)
 

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Your sentence is a good example of the usefulness of the Oxford comma. As written, the reader may see words of encouragement and guidance as the last item on a list of attributes. If you add a comma after "encouragement", you make it clear that there are two items at the end.

When a list includes just one multi-word item, it's best to put it at the end. Write Her enthusiasm, creativity, guidance, and words of encouragement are what separate her from other instructors in the gym. The Oxford comma after "guidance" is optional.
 

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When a list includes just one multi-word item, it's best to put it at the end.
Thanks you GoesStation. I like your points. They are always fresh and innovative.
 
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