Hi just wondering if you could spell check my email and proof read it thx

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Hi,
Jacqui

Just sending you this email to let you know what i will be doing at the end of this course and a bit about me.


Will if i can find a job thats suits the skills that i am learning it will be good, or even if i pass, but if i don't find a job ill go back to more studies.

Will i am originally from Hong Kong, move to New Zealand when i was only seven years old without knowing any to little English.

I went to lots of schools around the Auckland area, 1st one i ever when to was Henderson primary, i didn't learn much during my years there because i was still new to the language, so basicly when anyone talked to me in English i mostly cried. But as the years when on my spoken English become better and started making friends life became easier.
But for the past few years after i have left high school at the age of 17, i have been working . I have worked in Canton cafe a Chinese restaurant
on New North Road, worked there for like 4-5 months than left that. Than when on Work and Income for five months than found a job at Mobil.
Worked there for like two years and a half, but i left so that i could sturdy more like what i am currently doing.



Yours Sincerely,

Kelvin

 

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Hi,
Jacqui

Just sending you this email to let you know what i will be doing at the end of this course and a bit about me.


Will if i can find a job thats suits the skills that i am learning it will be good, or even if i pass, but if i don't find a job ill go back to more studies.

Will i am originally from Hong Kong, move to New Zealand when i was only seven years old without knowing any to little English.

I went to lots of schools around the Auckland area, 1st one i ever when to was Henderson primary, i didn't learn much during my years there because i was still new to the language, so basicly when anyone talked to me in English i mostly cried. But as the years when on my spoken English become better and started making friends life became easier.
But for the past few years after i have left high school at the age of 17, i have been working . I have worked in Canton cafe a Chinese restaurant
on New North Road, worked there for like 4-5 months than left that. Than when on Work and Income for five months than found a job at Mobil.
Worked there for like two years and a half, but i left so that i could sturdy more like what i am currently doing.



Yours Sincerely,

Kelvin

Firstly - always use capital "I" for the personal pronoun.
Secondly, use a full stop/period [.] rather than a comma[,] to end a sentence.

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