I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening than it would if

[tufguy]

Yesterday I had to go somewhere so I shaved twice. First in the morning and then in the evening before leaving. When I was shaving in the morning my mom asked me (casually) why I was shaving at that time when I had to shave in the evening. I told her if I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening than it would if I had shaved.


Please check my sentences.

 

[emsr2d2]

As is so often the case with your posts, you have used far more words than necessary to explain something very simple. Would you really use such a long-winded explanation to say this in Hindi? If not, think of the simple version you would use in Hindi and then just translate it into English.

 

[tufguy]

As is so often the case with your posts, you have used far more words than necessary to explain something very simple. Would you really use such a long-winded explanation to say this in Hindi? If not, think of the simple version you would use in Hindi and then just translate it into English.

When I was shaving in the morning my mom asked me (casually) why I was shaving when I had to shave in the evening as well. I told her if I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening than it would if I had shaved.

I would like to get this part checked in particular "I told her if I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening than it would if I had shaved."

 

[Tarheel]

Perhaps:

Yesterday morning as I was shaving my mom asked me why I was shaving then when I would have to shave in the evening. I told her that shaving then would shave time off my evening shave. (Pun intended.)

 

[emsr2d2]

When I was shaving [STRIKE]in the[/STRIKE] one morning, my mom asked me [STRIKE](casually)[/STRIKE] why I was shaving when I had to [STRIKE]shave[/STRIKE] do it again in the evening. [STRIKE]as well.[/STRIKE] I told her if I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening. [STRIKE]than it would if I had shaved.[/STRIKE]

I would like to get this part checked in particular "I told her if I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening than it would if I had shaved."

See above.

 

[Skrej]

I told her shaving twice a day lead to quicker shaves overall.

 

[emsr2d2]

I told her shaving twice a day leads to quicker shaves overall.

See above.

 

[tufguy]

See above.

I would like to get this part checked in particular "I told her if I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening than it would if I had shaved." Is this part correct?

 

[Raymott]

"I told her if I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening."

 

[Matthew Wai]

"I told her if I didn't shave in the morning, the evening shave would take longer."

 

[GoesStation]

I would like to get this part checked in particular: "I told her if I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening than it would if I had shaved." Is this part correct?

I can’t find a grammatical error in this, but it's a terrible sentence. The many words after evening add nothing.

 

[Roman55]

I told her if I didn't shave in the morning it would take me longer in the evening than it would if I had shaved.

Shaving twice takes more time than shaving once. I'd make better use of my time if I were you.