I have forgotten most of the story

[tufguy]

Let me tell you a story. But I have forgotten most of the story so I will tell you the story as I remember it.

Please check my sentence.

 

[Raymott]

You don't need to say 'story' three times in two short sentences.

 

[emsr2d2]

I want to tell you a story but I've forgotten a lot of it. I'll just tell you what I can remember.

(On that basis, don't expect the listener to be riveted by your storytelling. I suggest you tell them a story you can remember.)

 

[tufguy]

I want to tell you a story but I've forgotten a lot of it. I'll just tell you what I can remember.

(On that basis, don't expect the listener to be riveted by your storytelling. I suggest you tell them a story you can remember.)

Are my sentences wrong?