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Hello there,
not being a native English speaker, I'd like to know if the following chorus line for a song is grammatically correct. The words in questions are marked in bold faces.
"If someone would listen to me
What would I say
If someone would lend their ears to me
I know what I would say"
What's making me wonder is that, back in school, we learned never to use "would" in an if-clause. So it should be "if someone listened" etc...
However, this doesn't go with the song's meter and melody. The context of the quoted lyrics is that the narrator has a lot to say and wants to change the world with his song, but she is all on her own with a desire of being heard.
Secondly, there might be a problem with the word order in the 3rd line. Like Ringo Starr once sang "Lend me your ears and I'll sing you a song", I am asking you if the change "lend their ears to me" will be understood in the same way. (Of course, it shall not sound like "tearing off your ears and hand them over to me")
Thanking you in anticipation!
Thomas
not being a native English speaker, I'd like to know if the following chorus line for a song is grammatically correct. The words in questions are marked in bold faces.
"If someone would listen to me
What would I say
If someone would lend their ears to me
I know what I would say"
What's making me wonder is that, back in school, we learned never to use "would" in an if-clause. So it should be "if someone listened" etc...
However, this doesn't go with the song's meter and melody. The context of the quoted lyrics is that the narrator has a lot to say and wants to change the world with his song, but she is all on her own with a desire of being heard.
Secondly, there might be a problem with the word order in the 3rd line. Like Ringo Starr once sang "Lend me your ears and I'll sing you a song", I am asking you if the change "lend their ears to me" will be understood in the same way. (Of course, it shall not sound like "tearing off your ears and hand them over to me")
Thanking you in anticipation!
Thomas