IF

[iampm]

IF
If I must recollect you once I close my eyes,
I shall never sleep
If I must confront your name every time I turn on my phone
I shall not receive any others’ messages,
If I can not touch you by my phone,
I shall just kiss it like kissing you…
If you just have the same feelings as I do,
I shall not keep on torturing myself.
God！
How dare you treat me like this!
Love
Makes one addicted
You shall never know how deep it will flow to
And how deep shall I suffer.

 

[RonBee]

Re:

• If I must recollect you once I close my eyes,
  I shall never sleep

Are you afraid to go to sleep because you might dream about that person? I am afraid recollect doesn't work there very well in any case.

 

[Tdol]

For me,'reollect' is for memories of long back. ;-)

 

[RonBee]

I agree, and I also think "recollect" is a little archaic. Also, "see" would be better in the poem in question than "recollect". One sees things in dreams. One does not recollect them.

 

[iampm]

it's been really a long time that i could not connect the internet and just sorry for giving reply so late
i happen to come here and hope to exchange opinions with you all.
the reason why i use recollect is that i thought it could express my lovesickness more and now i'll look through carefully and choose words carefully next time

 

[RonBee]

Hi! It's good to "see" you again.

:hi:

 

[ion Joe]

You love him/her deeply, I can see it clearly from 'if'. It's a typical Chinese love letter. 'If' he/she sees the poem, he/she will be moved!

 

[Tdol]

Love sickness tneds to be closer than nostalgia, which is why I suggested not using 'recollect'. ;-)