I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"

[hampeh]

Hi all, I’m trying to write something. If you think I’m good, maybe I should consider myself to write a novel.
I’m sure there are a lot of grammatical errors. So hopefully nice guys here can help me to improve it. Thanks in advance.

I don’t know what else to do. My girlfriend just left me, I don’t have money but I have lot of debts to pay, and I don’t have job. Actually I have but since my employer didn’t pay my salary for 3 months, so I just consider myself as a jobless. Finding a job seems like a hard stuff nowadays. I sent a lot of email and broadcast my resume everywhere but the response was not as expected.

Since past 5 years, after graduate from the university, I study a lot of computer stuff. Read a lot of books, manuals, articles etc. sometimes, I’m really tired being in this industry. I.T. industries because you need to know more, to learn new things everyday to make sure you are good enough and that’s the reason why the employer want keep you in the company.

 

[hiennguyen]

Re: I'm trying to write somekind of novel - "jobless"_ this is just my suggestion

This is just some corrections.


I don’t know what else to do. My girlfriend just left me. I don’t have money however, lot of debts to pay while having no job. Actually I have but I haven't got my salary for 3 months, so I just consider myself as a jobless. Finding a job seems like a hard stuff nowadays. I have sent a lot of email and broadcast my resume everywhere but the response has not been as expected.

Since past 5 years, after graduating from the university, I have studied a lot of computer stuff, read a lot of books, manuals, articles etc. Sometimes, I’m really tired being in this industry. I.T. industries because you need to know more, to learn new things everyday to keep pace with the fast changes of knowledge and that’s the reason why the employer want keep you in the company.[/quote]

 

[hampeh]

Thanks hiennguyen for your prompt reply. I really appreciate it. I’ll continue this writing from time to time.

hopefully my english will improve especially in writing from day to day.

 

[hampeh]

continue..

Since 2 months ago, I didn’t stop from sending my resume to get a new job. I have attended a couple of interview and everything seems to go well. Tomorrow, I supposed to get good news. Actually, I already got an offer from one organization in my place. So I am expecting them to call me tomorrow for my offer letter. After that, I’ll resign from my current ruthless company.
However until this day, I still didn’t get any payment since 3 months ago. I’m not sure whether they are going to pay my salary or not, but I’ll fight for it. For now, I’m not really sure how to do it and still doing the research, reading some law stuff how to fight for it.

 

[hiennguyen]

Hi...
I think you are getting better in your writing. I mean.. in structure and grammar. However, if you want to develop this into a novel, it is not very easy. Because it is just like a diary.
You should invest more in building ideas to direct it into a kind of story not just flat and boring sentences like what you are doing
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