[General] Invitation letter sentence

[davetherave]

Player X will train from 20th of June to 17th of September within a tennis professional surrounding and modern tennis facilities in our Tennis academy.

Sounds somehow strange, doest it?

 

[GoesStation]

Yes. It's incoherent.

 

[emsr2d2]

Player X will train from 20th of June to 17th of September [STRIKE]within a[/STRIKE] in professional [STRIKE]tennis[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]professional[/STRIKE] surroundings [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] at [STRIKE]modern tennis facilities in[/STRIKE] our modern tennis academy.

It sounds [STRIKE]somehow[/STRIKE] strange, doesn't it?

See above.

 

[andrewg927]

I would capitalize "Academy."