Is it correct?

[Anonymous]

Hi everyone
Could someone help me with the letter? Is it correct?

"Dear Mr. Brown,
I am happy to get a letter offering a job within your company.
You did not tell me when you want me to start working for you. My present employer expect me to stay with him until the end of the month.
We are thinking about buying a house close to the office. My wife is anxious about finding a good school for the children to attend. She is worried they will not be able to continue studying the same subjects.
Let's hope that the problems do not take long to solve.
I am looking forward to starting to work for you."


Let's ??? How can I put together these three words "let, hope, problems" and the rest of the sentence which is in the text?

Thanks a lot for all the help,
abrilsp

 

[RonBee]

Hi everyone

Hi! :hi:

Could someone help me with the letter? Is it correct?

Yes. Not entirely.

"Dear Mr. Brown,
I am happy to get a letter offering a job within your company.
You did not tell me when you want me to start working for you.

• Dear Mr. Brown,
  I was glad to get a letter from you offering me a job with your company. Unfortunately, you did not tell me when you want me to start working for you.

The second sentence was a little too abrupt.

My present employer expect me to stay with him until the end of the month.

• My present employer expects me to stay with him until the end of the month.

I highlighted in bold the word that I changed.

We are thinking about buying a house close to the office. My wife is anxious about finding a good school for the children to attend. She is worried they will not be able to continue studying the same subjects.
Let's hope that the problems do not take long to solve. I am looking forward to starting to work for you.

• We are thinking about buying a house close to the office. My wife is looking for a good school for the children to attend. I am looking forward to working for you. Please tell me when you want me to start.

It is not, I think, a good idea to include information that your potential employer might find extraneous. It is also not a good idea to drop hints that he might not be responding quickly enough. However, you shouldn't forget your main purpose.

 

[RonBee]

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[abrilsp]

Thanks a lot RonBee.
Actually I got this "letter" from an exercise of a book. I was given the words I should use and I had to make the changes in order to write the letter.
Regards,
abrilsp

 

[RonBee]

Thanks a lot RonBee.
Actually I got this "letter" from an exercise of a book. I was given the words I should use and I had to make the changes in order to write the letter.
Regards,
abrilsp

Well, you didn't do badly.

One thing to remember is that anxious about and anxious to mean two different things. If you are anxious about something that means you are concerned about something (perhaps experiencing anxiety). If you are anxious to do something that means you are looking forward to doing it or eager to do it.

Welcome! :hi:

 

[abrilsp]

Thanks for the explanation.
I have just discovered this forum and I think it is great!
I think you will see me around :wink:

abrilsp

 

[RonBee]

Welcome aboard!

:hi: