Is the second sentence correct?

[KLPNO]

Hello everyone

I'd like to ask if the second sentence in the following context is written correctly.

The second parameter reflectsthe nature of interaction between the employee and internal/external clients. Depending on whose interests the specialist’s attention should be focused (on his/her own or partner’s) the interaction is built based on internal or external references.

 

[naomimalan]

Hello everyone

I'd like to ask if the second sentence in the following context is written correctly.

The second parameter reflectsthe nature of interaction between the employee and internal/external clients. Depending on whose interests the specialist’s attention should be focused (on his/her own or partner’s) the interaction is built based on internal or external references.

If this is part of a contract or legal document, I think you'll have to respect the his/her business:

Depending on whose interests the specialist’s attention should be focused on (his/her own or his/her partner’s), the interaction is built based on internal or external references.