is the sentence grammatically correct?

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KLPNO

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Hello everyone
I'd like to ask if the following sentence is correct.

Another participant in the discussion, Ms. X, noted that analyzing the situation with the development of NGOs in our country it should be admitted that despair perhaps makes NGOs more 'radical' to some degree compared with political parties.

NGO stands for non-governmental organization.
 

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It seems wrong to me. If you insert 'in' or 'when' before 'analyzing' , it would be better. Also you might consider changing 'compared with' to 'in comparison with'.
 

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Another participant in the discussion, Ms. X, noted that when analyzing the situation with the development of NGOs in our country, it should be admitted that, to some degree, perhaps it is despair that makes NGOs more 'radical,' compared to political parties.

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Ms. X felt that, when analyzing the situation with the development of NGOs in our country, perhaps it is despair that makes NGOs seem more "radical", compared to political parties.
 
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