is this a good introduction to an essay?

niaaa

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This is an argumentative essay introduction about john brown, and I'm not really good at essays so i need some advice on this introduction and whether or not it has a clear thesis or not. here is it:

[FONT=&quot]Americans tend to have different opinions on whether a person is a good martyr or a bad martyr. John Brown has his fans and his haters. Brown was something you did not see much of in the eighteenth century; he was a strong slavery abolitionist. He went on a mission to free slaves, but the mission ended with people dead. Despite this negative element, John Brown should be recognized as an American hero and a martyr, who was trying to give freedom to people who deserved it.[/FONT]
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The last sentence is drawing conclusions before you have been through the positive and negative sides.
 

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I understand your thesis is: John Brown should be recognized as an American hero and a martyr.

That seems clear enough to me.
 

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In that case, it might be better to move that to the start with something like even though after it.
 

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This is an argumentative essay introduction about John Brown, and I'm not really good at essays so I need some advice on this introduction and whether or not it has a clear thesis or not. Here [STRIKE]is it[/STRIKE] it is:

See above. Remember to use correct capitalisation in all your writing, not just in your essays.
 
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