Is this good English

[snade17]

Could you tell if the sentence below is grammatically correct. Does it sound OK in English?

"Psychometric tests are used during the selection process to provide a potential employer with an insight into what the overall performance of an applicant within the organization would be."

 

[Raymott]

Could you tell if the sentence below is grammatically correct. Does it sound OK in English?

"Psychometric tests are used during the selection process to provide a potential employer with an insight into what the overall performance of an applicant within the organization would be."

Yes, it's OK.

 

[billmcd]

Could you tell if the sentence below is grammatically correct. Does it sound OK in English?

"Psychometric tests are used during the selection process to provide a potential employer with [STRIKE] an [/STRIKE]insight into what the overall performance of an applicant [STRIKE] within the organization [/STRIKE] (Although it's not wrong, I don't think this phrase is necessary since you have already indicated that the tests are administered by an employer.) would be."

b.