Is this sentence correct?

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"Each year, thousands of people get lost in the Arizona desert. Of these, some 200 will die."


Is it correct to begin a sentence with "Of these"? Should I say "Of those" instead?

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Mone said:
"Each year, thousands of people get lost in the Arizona desert. Of these, some 200 will die."


Is it correct to begin a sentence with "Of these"? Should I say "Of those" instead?

Your sentences have two contrasting tenses. Put them in the same tense. Try:
  • Each year, thousands of people get lost in the Arizona desert. About 200 of them die.

You could also say:
  • Each year, thousands of people get lost in the Arizona desert. Of that number, about 200 die.

What do you think?

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