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Vincent Chan
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"Do you want to buy something in Hong Kong but you live overseas?
We can do the shopping for you."
Thank You!!
We can do the shopping for you."
Thank You!!
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I'm not a teacher; but I have some suggestions:
"Do you want" sounds not so polite. I'd rather use "Would you like" or "Do you like".
I think "but you live overseas" is redundant in the sentence because the listener already knew where he/she are living.
Maybe we can add "without travelling" to highlight the point:
Would you like to buy something in Hong Kong without travelling personally?
How about "We can shop for you."?
"Do you want" sounds not so polite. I'd rather use "Would you like" or "Do you like".
I think "but you live overseas" is redundant in the sentence because the listener already knew where he/she are living.
Maybe we can add "without travelling" to highlight the point:
Would you like to buy something in Hong Kong without travelling personally?
How about "We can shop for you."?
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Grammatically, those sentences are fine. As for style issues, that is something else.
Perhaps: "Do you think you might like to buy something in Hong Kong, but you don't want to have to travel to Hong Kong? We can save you a trip. We'll do the shopping for you."
Perhaps: "Do you think you might like to buy something in Hong Kong, but you don't want to have to travel to Hong Kong? We can save you a trip. We'll do the shopping for you."
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"Do you want to buy something in Hong Kong but live overseas?
We can do the shopping for you."
You can delete the second 'you', which sounds better to me. ;-)
We can do the shopping for you."
You can delete the second 'you', which sounds better to me. ;-)
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