is this sentence ok?

[jctgf]

hi,
could someone please let me know if the little piece of text bellow is clear?

I have already exchanged the...
My experience was a little clumsy but worth. If, or, better saying, ''when'' you buy yours, you'll remember those little details that, in the end, make a big difference!

thanks.

 

[susiedqq]

I have already exchanged the...
My experience was a little clumsy but worth it. If - or better yet - when you buy yours, you'll remember those little details that end up resulting in a big difference.

 

[jctgf]

I have already exchanged the...
My experience was a little clumsy but worth it. If - or better yet - when you buy yours, you'll remember those little details that end up resulting in a big difference.

hi Susiedqq,
if you had to grade my original text, what grade would you give it?
thanks.

 

[susiedqq]

My experience was a little clumsy but worth. (what?)


If, or, better saying, ''when'' you buy yours, you'll remember those little details that, in the end, make a big difference!

Just these two areas needed clarification.

An "A" of course!!!:lol:

 

[jctgf]

you are very kind!
thanks!