[Grammar] it also increases the revenue factories earn by...

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saloom2

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Hello everyone,

Well,I want better sentences than that one expressing the same meaning.

Machines also increase the revenue factories earn by firing employees whom they are no longer demanded.
 

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Firing employees does nothing to increase revenue. It can decrease costs, and thus increase profits.

Machines can lower labor costs.
 

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Yes, I just want to say the point you have just mentioned in a good way!
 

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Machines don't fire employees. At the moment, your sentence suggests that they do. Have another try.
 

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After amendments, that's what I have written in my essay "Nowadays, factories currently use machines in stead of human beings because machines not only produce products in a very high quality without any any mistakes, but also increases the net profit the factory receive by taking away employees whom factories no longer need" That what I do really mean!
 

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Not in a hurry but I just don't want anyone to forget my question, please!
 
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