[Grammar] it also increases the revenue factories earn by...

[saloom2]

Hello everyone,

Well,I want better sentences than that one expressing the same meaning.

Machines also increase the revenue factories earn by firing employees whom they are no longer demanded.

 

[Barb_D]

Firing employees does nothing to increase revenue. It can decrease costs, and thus increase profits.

Machines can lower labor costs.

 

[saloom2]

Yes, I just want to say the point you have just mentioned in a good way!

 

[emsr2d2]

Machines don't fire employees. At the moment, your sentence suggests that they do. Have another try.

 

[saloom2]

After amendments, that's what I have written in my essay "Nowadays, factories currently use machines in stead of human beings because machines not only produce products in a very high quality without any any mistakes, but also increases the net profit the factory receive by taking away employees whom factories no longer need" That what I do really mean!

 

[saloom2]

Not in a hurry but I just don't want anyone to forget my question, please!