It is Barbara De Angelis' s book

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Hello all,

Is the following sentence correct?

It is Barbara De Angelis's book, Confidence: Finding it and Living it, which has really helped me develop my self-confidence, and which makes me believe in myself in difficult times in my life, and (makes me) overcome fear of failure.
 
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Hello all,

Is the following sentence correct?

It is Barbara De Angelis's book, Confidence: Finding it and Living it, [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE] that has really helped me develop my self-confidence, [STRIKE]and which[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]makes[/STRIKE] made me believe in myself [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] at difficult times in my life, and [STRIKE](makes me)[/STRIKE] helped me overcome my fear of failure.

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I wouldn't start with "It is" and continue with "that has". I would start with "Barbara de Angelis' book, Confidence ..., has ...".
 

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ambitious girl, please note that ems prefers to use the possessive form Barbara de Angelis' book.

She did not change your version ... Angelis's book as both versions are correct.
 
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I don't think it's really wrong, but it could be better. What's the difference between self-confidence and believing in myself? Probably one or the other could be omitted, but I'll leave them in. Try to keep your sentences as simple as possible, and keep the verbs in the same tense: Shorter is always better.

Barbara De Angelis's book, "Confidence: Finding it and Living it", has really helped me develop my self-confidence, believe in myself, and overcome fear of failure.
 

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Thanks teachers for all your valuable help and suggestions.

Unfortunately, I am in the bad habit of using complex structures. Then, I make too many mistakes. I suppose If I write simple sentences, I won't get the desired score on my exam. That's why I prefered to use the cleft-sentence to make my sentences sound more complicated, as well as make more emphasis on the effect of the book on my life. I'll try to take your advice on my writing.
 

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Thanks teachers for all your valuable help and suggestions.

Unfortunately, I am in the bad habit of using complex structures. Then, I make too many mistakes. I suppose if I write simple sentences, I won't get the desired score on my exam. That's why I prefered to use the cleft-sentence to make my sentences sound more complicated, as well as make more emphasis on the effect of the book on my life. I'll try to take your advice on my writing.
See above. I've been seeing this so often that I'm getting the feeling that English learners in some places are taught to always capitalize "if". If so, don't; it follows the same rules of capitalization as every other word except "I".
 

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Thanks GoesStation.
In fact, I first started my sentence with "If I write simple...", and then I added "I suppose". That's why I forgot to change "I" from uppercase to lowercase.
 
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