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irene_18_30

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I want to tell me if this text is grammaticaly correct:
It's spring.The sky is blue and the trees are green.Our garden is full of flowers.Outside it's warm and the wind blows slowly.The sun is on the sky.
It's summer.It's hot.The children swim in the lake.There are no clouds on the sky.The days are long and sunny.The nights are warm and starry.It's holiday and children are happy.
It's autumn.The schools begins.It's rainy.It's a windy weather.The wind blows all day and the sky is grey.But there are lots of fruit and vegetables.
It's winter.It's cold and everything is white. The children play with the snow.They make snowmen and play with the snowballs.Children love winter.

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Very good - but not quite ... ;-)

It's spring.The sky is blue and the trees are green.Our garden is full of flowers.Outside it's warm and the wind is blowing gently.The sun is in the sky.

It's summer.It's hot.The children are swimming in the lake.There are no clouds in the sky.The days are long and sunny.The nights are warm and starry. It's holidaytime and the children are happy.

It's autumn.The schools begins.It's rainy. It's windy.The wind blows all day and the sky is grey, but there are lots of fruit and vegetables.

It's winter. It's cold and everything is white. The children play in the snow.They make snowmen and play with snowballs. Children love winter.
 

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Is it correct ?

I want to tell me if this text is grammaticaly correct:

It is spring. The sky is blue and the trees are green. Our garden is full of flowers. It is warm outside and the wind blows gently. ((delete the next sentence: the sun is always IN the sky)).

It is summer and hot. Children swim in the lake. The days are long and sunny, and there are no clouds in the sky. The nights are warm and starry. It is holiday time and all the children are happy.

It is autumn. School begins. It is windy and rainy. The sky is grey and the wind blows all day. There are lots of fruit and vegetables in the garden.

It is winter and everything is covered white. The children play with the snow.They make snowmen and throw snowballs. Children love winter.


I have made some changes to your piece. With writing, I think it is better to put 'It is.....', rather that 'It's....'. In spring, don't write 'the sun is in the sky', because the sun is ALWAYS in the sky. In summer, you CAN say 'there are no clouds in the sky', for 'literary effect'. Clouds are ALWAYS in the sky, but here the length of the sentence matches the laziness of the mood.

Instead of 'It is autumn', you could write 'In autumn, school begins', just to create some difference in your paragraphs.

I hope this helps.
 
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