Maiden princess

[Devil's tear]

sing for my heart
cry your eyes out
and I'll know that you are still there
under our promised tree

your pearly eyes
bare my desires
your maiden princess
burns by your fires
under your insatiable desires
and above your sacred skies
Feel for me.. your maiden princess is here for you.


Are there any mistakes?
Thanks in advance.

 

[Anglika]

I would prefer to see punctuation.

So far as I can tell there are no glaring errors, and it is expressive.

 

[Devil's tear]

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY
Thank you Angilka. I finally wrote something without any mistake wow. This day is sacred and special. Wow.
I didn't get what do you mean here: punctuation but Thanks again.
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[Shakespeare's brother]

With punctuation:

your pearly eyes
bare my desires,
your maiden princess
burns by your fires.
under your insatiable desires
and above your sacred skies,
Feel for me.. your maiden princess is here for you.

Hope that helps, and unless you want to make writing in small case a trade mark of your own style (as has been done before), you could do with some capital letters at the beginnings of the lines.

SB

 

[Devil's tear]

ahaaaaaa I got it now. Thank you Shakespeare's brother.
;-)​