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NBA Legend with a Good Heart

. Michael Jordan was an outstanding basketball player, well known for his great accomplishments and his good heart. He was the best basketball player in the NBA. He was a 5-time Most Valuable Player, won 6 NBA titles with the Chicago Bulls, and was ranked first in scoring average when he retired. He was brought up to be good-hearted, responsible and very dependable. Unlike many superstar athletes, he was not pushed by his parents to be a great athlete, but rather to be a good person with strong moral character, confidence, and high self esteem. He turned out to be very passionate and giving. He created a charitable foundation called the Michael Jordan Foundation. It supported charities and also created events for youth such as Minor League Baseball teams, basketball teams and other fun things for the youth to participate in. Michael Jordan’s foundation donated 5 million dollars to the National Foundation for the Improvement of Education. These are some of the reasons why Michael Jordan is known for his outstanding basketball skills and also his good heart.
 

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Is there anything I should add or take out? It's a descriptive paragraph of michael jordan.



NBA Legend with a Good Heart

Michael Jordan was an outstanding basketball player, well known for his great accomplishments and his good heart. He was the best basketball player in the NBA.
:up:​

He was a 5-time Most Valuable Player, won 6 NBA titles with the Chicago Bulls, and was ranked first in scoring average when he retired.
Make two sentences out of that.​

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He turned out to be very passionate and giving.
Don't you mean "compassionate"?
He created a charitable foundation called the Michael Jordan Foundation. It supported charities and also created events for youth such as minor league baseball teams, basketball teams and other fun things for the youth to participate in. Michael Jordan’s foundation donated five million dollars to the National Foundation for the Improvement of Education.
Sports teams are not events. What would be a better word?

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