Michael stood in the window

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Michael stood in the window, watching the rain lashing down into the street. He felt a pity for the people, weary from the lack of sleep, hurrying to their jobs through the puddles of water and fallen leaves.
 

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Michael stood in (I'd use "at") the window, watching the rain lashing down into (I'd use "onto") the street. He felt [STRIKE]a pity[/STRIKE] sorry for the people, weary from [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] lack of sleep, hurrying to their jobs through the puddles of water and fallen leaves.

See above. I've added my preferences in brackets but your originals aren't wrong. "a pity" is wrong, though. "He felt sorry for" is much more natural though it is just about possible to say "He felt pity for ..." (no article).
 
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