[General] My child, these lines rise from the abyss of my despair

[Marina Gaidar]

A mother writes to her child "My child, these lines rise from the abyss of my despair". Does it cound ok? It may be archaic and poetic, but it certainly must be natural.

 

[bhaisahab]

A mother writes to her child "My child, these lines rise from the abyss of my despair". Does it cound ok? It may be archaic and poetic, but it certainly must be natural.

It's OK, in your context. I would use "arise" instead of "rise", though.;-)