[Grammar] My sentence is too long: I like the food I get .... more than the food I get ...

ansonguy

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Every week, church volunteers in my local area cook and give free food to everyone. This is what I said to my non-native English speaking friends.

(1) I like the food I get from the church more than the food I get from my home.

They said that my sentence is too long. So, they revised it for me.

(2) revised sentence: I like the food served in the church more than in my home.

May I ask you two questions?

(A) Is my sentence too long?

(B) In the revised sentence, is it grammatically correct to say "food served in the church"?

Could you please answer my two questions? Thank you very much for your time and help.
 

Raymott

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The revised sentence is not good.
Yes, it's grammatically correct to say "the food served in the church". However, it's not semantically correct if the food is not served in the church.

"I like the food I get from the church more than the food I get from my home."
Your sentence is not too long but a native speaker with more language options might choose something less repetitive. "I like the church food more/better than what I get at home."
 

Tdol

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How about:

I prefer the food at church to what I get at home.
 
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