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[gonghai]

Topic: Do you prefer brand name or no name brand?

I enjoy shopping all the time. I go to the grocery store twice every week. When doing my grocery shopping, I do not like purchasing no name brand products because they taste awful, turn bad really fast, and their label is ugly.

In the past, I have bought a jar of no name peanut butter, and it tasted awful. The no name peanut butter was oily and tasted like olive oil. It was very disgusting. Kraft peanut butter tastes better. Two years ago, I bought no name soda crackers, and they smelled like raw fish. The quality of no name brand is bad.

No name products always turn bad before the expiry date. Last week, I bought a bag of no name chips, it turned bad two days later. Lays and other brand name chips last much longer. I ate expired Lays chips before, and I was fine. Five years ago, I bought a jar of no name strawberry jam. I opened it, and it had already turned bad. In my opinion, no name brand does not last long.

The label for no name product is plain yellow with No Name written on it. I think the label is ugly. Brand name, Kraft has two very cute bears as its label. When doing my grocery shopping, I like buying products that have very attracting labels. For example, Honey Nuts Cherrios has a bee as its label.

I will never purchase no name brand every again. It tastes awful and label is ugly. I would not even recommend it to my friend.

I am not criticizing no name and brand name. I just need someone to edit my grammar.
Thank you in advance.

 

[Tdol]

Para 1- their labels are ugly
Para 2- I would say 'they turned bad' rather than 'it turned bad'

Para 3- no name products.... the brand name Kraft

Para 4- It tastes awfuk- only one product?

;-)

 

[teachingfoot92]

i agree on what you are saying. I have also tried no name brands. I thought they would be better. Boy, I was wrong.
On this paragraph:
In the past, I have bought a jar of no name peanut butter, and it tasted awful. The no name peanut butter was oily and tasted like olive oil. It was very disgusting. Kraft peanut butter tastes better. Two years ago, I bought no name soda crackers, and they smelled like raw fish. The quality of no name brand is bad.
You need to seperate ideas like this:
In the past, I have bought a jar of no name peanut butter, and it tasted awful. The no name peanut butter was oily and tasted like olive oil. It was very disgusting. Kraft peanut butter tastes better.
Two years ago, I bought no name soda crackers, and they smelled like raw fish. The quality of no name brand is bad.
Peanut butter has nothing to do with crackers. So just seperate your ideas next time okay? :wink: