[Grammar] Net addiction

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Ashiuhto

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Please help me correct the following sentences.

According to the questionnaire, we analyzed it and got the result:
The number of Net addiction boy students is more than girl students. Of 120 students, there are 57 students having the Net addiction phenomenon. They are 30 boys and 27 girls.
 

emsr2d2

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Please help me correct the following sentences.

[STRIKE]According to the questionnaire, [/STRIKE]We have analyzed [STRIKE]it[/STRIKE] the recent questionnaire and [STRIKE]got[/STRIKE] these are the results

[STRIKE]The number of Net addiction boy students is more than girl students.[/STRIKE] The number of male students addicted to the internet is higher than that of girl students.

Of 120 students, [STRIKE]there are[/STRIKE] 57 students [STRIKE]having the Net addiction phenomenon[/STRIKE] said they were addicted to the internet. [STRIKE]They are[/STRIKE] The 57 students comprise 30 boys and 27 girls.


See my amendments above. Please note that in BrE, the phrase "the Net addiction phenomenon" is unnatural.
 

Raymott

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Also, you can't 'have' a phenomenon.
 
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