not only....but also

[Hong Kong Chinese]

My today’s last question: Is the following sentence correct by ignoring the inadvertent spelling errors?

I believe university education will not only provide me with the ncessary academic skills, but also the valuable opportunity to develope my character to the fullest.

The link: http://www.hkedcity.net/ihouse_tool...rum_id=83060&current_page=2&i=465693&t=464665

Will it be better if I change it like this?

I believe that university education will provide me with not only the necessary academic skills, but also the valuable opportunity to develop my character to the fullest.

Thank you!

 

[RonBee]

Your rewrite is a good one, but I don't think it is necessarily better than the original. It is no worse, but I don't think it is any better either. (Perhaps someone will disagree with me.)