Nowhere else Peter felt so alone as

[Bassim]

Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentence? Could my sentence be improved?

Nowhere else Peter felt so alone as on the London underground, surrounded by the passengers who looked away whenever you looked at them, felt uncomfortable if you caught their eye, and avoided contact of any kind.

 

[bhaisahab]

Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentence? Could my sentence be improved?

Nowhere else did Peter feel so alone as on the London underground, surrounded by passengers who looked away whenever you looked at them, who felt uncomfortable if you caught their eye, and avoided contact of any kind.

My suggestions. I can't help feeling, though, that it would be better broken up into two sentences.

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

Nowhere else did Peter feel so alone as on the London underground, surrounded by people who looked away whenever he looked at them, felt uncomfortable if he caught their eye, and avoided social contact of any kind.

 

[Bassim]

I will write my sentence again after bhaisahab's corrections and suggestion.

Nowhere else did Peter feel so alone as on the London underground, surrounded by passengers who looked away whenever you looked at them. They felt uncomfortable if you caught their eye, and avoided contact of any kind.

 

[Tarheel]

When I am on the bus I think of the other people on the bus as people first and passengers second.

 

[Tdol]

London underground

I'd capitalise Underground.