[General] operation transfer

contiluo

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Which of the following wording is better, #1 or #2?

1. Operating Transfer of Taoyuan Municipal Yangmei Junior High School Teaching Pool
2. Taoyuan Municipal Yangmei Junior High School Teaching Pool Operating Transfer
 

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Can you tell us something about what this kind of transfer is and what's being transferred?
 

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The ownership of the swimming pool belongs to Taoyuan Municipal Yangmei Junior High School. However, its operational rights plans to be transferred to another professional company. Because school has no sufficient professional competence, manpower, and finance to maintain the commercial operation of its swimming pool.
 

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Maybe "operational rights transfer of Taoyuan Municipal Yangmei Junior High School's teaching pool".
 
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