Outside a concert hall

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct. I know that the sentence is long, but I didn't know how to make it shorter.

Outside a concert hall, a massive crowd gathered, as if the whole town wanted to come inside and listen to the young pianist who critics called a genius.
 

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It is correct.
 

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Use "go" instead of "come"; and consider using "the concert hall", especially if you're referring to a specific/known one.
 

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To break it up, you could make two sentences.

Outside a/the concert hall, a massive crowd gathered. It was as if the whole town wanted to come and listen to the young pianist critics were calling a genius.
 
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