Parallelism(Before the judge announced the punishment,)

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The following is original sentence:

Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murdered if he wanted to speak C

Can these make sense in parallel grammatical form?


Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murdered either if he wanted to speak to the victim's family or if he wanted to speak to the jury.


Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murdered if he wanted either to speak to the victim's family or to speak to the jury.
 

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Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murderer if he wanted to speak to either the victim's family or (to) the jury.
 

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A judge who asks a murdered (person) something is destined for disappointment.
 

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A judge who asks a murdered (person) something is destined for disappointment.

True, but it would make his/her job a whole lot simpler.
 

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Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murderer if he wanted to speak to either the victim's family or (to) the jury.

I know two other alternatives make sentence too repetitive and longer. But are those correct as a parallel grammatical form?

Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murdered either if he wanted to speak to the victim's family or if he wanted to speak to the jury.


Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murdered if he wanted either to speak to the victim's family or to speak to the jury.
 

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The first one sounds like you know the judge asked something, but you're not sure which one it was.

The second one is just awkward. If you delete "either" it sounds like the murderer can speak to one or the other, but not both.

(I have never heard of a defendant being allowed to address the jury.)
 

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Sure a defendant can address the jury. But only if he is representing himself, in which case he has a fool for a client, as the old saying goes.
 

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I know two other alternatives make sentence too repetitive and longer. But are those correct as a parallel grammatical form?

Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the
murdered either if he wanted to speak to the victim's family or if he wanted to speak to the jury.


Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the
murdered if he wanted either to speak to the victim's family or to speak to the jury.

You've repeated the mistake from post #1 again. The "murdered" person is dead. Try again.
 

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A judge who asks a murdered (person) something is destined for disappointment.
GoesStation,

What does sentence above mean?
I have made a mistake by writing "murdered" instead of "murderer" . Did you mean if the jury who ask someone who is already dead about her/his forgiveness in a court considered to be disappointment and the jury is definitely psycho.
 

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Please look up the words "judge" and "jury" and write a corrected version of post #9.

Also, remember that you can never put a space before a period ("full stop" in British English).
 
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