peer feedback sheet question

[bosun]

If you see any mistakes in the following sentence, can I have your comments?


1. Do you think the writer clearly indicates why he/she wants to study the subject in the introduction?

2. What do you like about this introduction?

3. Are there any lines or parts that aren't clear to you?( meaning not clear, supporting points missing, writing not lively)

4 What will be the one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this introduction?

 

[tedtmc]

If you see any mistakes in the following sentence, can I have your comments?


1. Do you think the writer clearly indicates why he/she wants to study the subject in the introduction?
(I prefer 'explains')

2. What do you like about this introduction?

3. Are there any lines or parts that aren't clear to you?( [STRIKE]meaning not clear[/STRIKE], e.g. supporting points missing, writing not lively)

4 What will be the one change you could make (would suggest) that you think would make the biggest improvement in to this introduction?

not a teacher

 

[Raymott]

4 What would be the one change that would make the biggest improvement to this introduction?

R.