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NastiaKu

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Good evening, I need help. I'm not sure about my knowledge of grammar, could you say there are mistakes in these proposals, and if you can where they are.
"The table provides the proportions of how each of young male and female listened to music in Tokyo, Japan, last month, and the pie chart describes the proportion of which people like live or recorded music around the world.As can be seen from the table, the vast majority (79%) of young Japanese male used MP3-players, and nearly two third of them listened to music by Live music and Internet, 60% and 55%.On the other hand, for young Japanese female the proportions of these three ways are under half, Live music is 44%, MP3-players is 40% and Internet is 42%. CDs isn't popular among both."

Thanks in advance
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Welcome to the forum.

We don't help with students' homework.
 

NastiaKu

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The table provides the proportions of how each

Good evening, I need help. I'm not sure about my knowledge of grammar, could you say there are mistakes in these proposals, and if you can where they are.
"The table provides the proportions of how each of young male and female listened to music in Tokyo, Japan, last month, and the pie chart describes the proportion of which people like live or recorded music around the world."
Thanks in advance
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emsr2d2

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Re: The table provides the proportions of how each

NastiaKu, I have changed your thread title so that it includes some of the words you are actually asking us about. Also, your original title was "graf" - that is not an English word. Perhaps you meant "graph".
 

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Re: The table provides the proportions of how each

I have merged your two almost identical threads.
 

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Yes, there are definitely mistakes.

Don't say "Where they are?" Instead, say "Where are they?"
 
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