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nike80

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Could you check my sentences.

I was very glad that I could work out a new skill which is updating the website.
Today I was supposed to update offers of properties for rent. Nuala said that they had many offers and it was necessary to tidy them up. After updating folders with offers, it was necessary to update a website as well as windows display.
There was a lot of work and Nuala and me agreed that at first I would update website and then folders with offers.
Today I was in the branch in Sligo in which there only one person is working. Tidying offers up was my first task. I had to sort them out according to prices and supplement if for some reason were missing e.g. photos of the property, the map of the journey or the description. Next I stayed alone in the office since Bill had a meeting with the customer. Answering the phones and the service of customers visiting the bureau were my task.

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Hello
Could you check my sentences.

I was very glad that I could work out a new skill which is updating the website. :up:

Today I was supposed to update offers of properties for rent. Nuala said that they had many offers and it was necessary to tidy them up.:up: After updating the folders with offers, it was necessary to update a website as well as the windows display. If you are talking about the Windows as in the Microsoft Windows, it needs to be capitalized.

There was a lot of work and Nuala and me I agreed that at first I would update the website and then the folders with offers.
Today I was in the branch in Sligo in which there is only one person is working.


Tidying offers up was my first task.:up: I had to sort them out according to prices and supplement if for some reason there were items missing e.g. photos of the property, the map of the journey or the description.
Next I stayed alone in the office since Bill had a meeting with the customer. :up:Answering the phones and the service of customers visiting the bureau were my tasks. :up:

Delete the red.

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Hello
Could you check my sentences.

I was very glad that I could work out a new skill which is updating the website.
Today I was supposed to update offers of properties for rent. Nuala said that they had many offers and it was necessary to tidy them up. After updating folders with offers, it was necessary to update a website as well as windows display.
There was a lot of work and Nuala and me agreed that at first I would update website and then folders with offers.
Today I was in the branch in Sligo in which there only one person is working. Tidying offers up was my first task. I had to sort them out according to prices and supplement if for some reason were missing e.g. photos of the property, the map of the journey or the description. Next I stayed alone in the office since Bill had a meeting with the customer. Answering the phones and the service of customers visiting the bureau were my task.

Thank you


Please see my suggestion for your piece:

I am pleased to say that today I learnt a new skill: how to update a website.

Today I had to update offers of properties to rent. Nuala said that they had many offers which needed tidying up (or sorting out). After updating the folders with the offers, it was then necessary to update the website as well as the window display.

There was a lot of work and Nuala and I agreed that I would update the website first, and then deal with the folders.

Today, I was in the Sligo branch, where only one person works. Tidying up the offers was my first task. I had to organise them according to price and add, if for some reason they were lacking, photos of the properties, maps of how to get there and the descriptions. After that, I stayed in the office alone, because Bill had a meeting with a customer. Answering the phones and dealing with personal callers to the office were my main tasks.

MAIN NOTES: There is a contradiction in paragraphs 2 and 3. In paragraph 2, you said that you did the website and window display AFTER updating the folders. In paragraph 3, you said that you agreed with Nuala that you would update the website first and then deal with the folders. Which one was it?
"Window display" - not windowS display.
 

nike80

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Thank you for your help. It really helped me in my school and to understand English grammar.

I have one more piece to check.

Today I was very much upset since I had to stay alone in the office and I was afraid that I wouldn't manage myself. My irritation deepened when it turned out that I had forgotten to give offers to the customer. Fortunately I quickly controlled myself and I solved a problem. I was very satisfied, that I listened to Bill's advice and I took the No. of the phone from the customer.
Thank you
 
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