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Please correct the grammar and vocabs of my article and if you think it;s not in proper form please correct it too^^


this is it:
The military junta of the Thailand has been reputated incompetant.

But now the Thailand junta is recognized world-widely as it attacks the

foreign major medicine-manufacturing companies like Merck, sanofi-aventis,

and Bristol-myers squibb. Since last November, the Thailand government has

allowed to produce the duplication of two types of foreign AIDS medicines

and one of blood clot remover. It was the measure nased on the ambiguous

regulation of WTO allowing government to abolish medical tenant when

public health-care is in trouble. Due to this measure, the medical fee burden

of patients has been reduced to 90% maximum. In this moment, the Thailand

government is pressuring the foreign medical-manufacturing companys to

discount other medical prices. Last month, Monkol Na Songkha, the health-

care minister, warned " we are ready to act if the negotiation of medicine fee

is failed".




The experts metaphor the medicine regulation of WTO as a nuclear weapon.

Never used but the best hold-back measure. Since that regulation became in

effect in 2001, the medicine manufacturing companies have been avoided

the worst situation, through adopting measures, including discount of

medicine price and allowing poor countries to use more free- use period.

Thailand became the first country among mid- income sountries which

practically stopped the tenans of the foreign medicine_manufacturing

companies based on the regulation of WTO.

if other mid-income countries follow the precedent of Thailand, this country ,

with 2,750 dollars GDP, will be the representative example of reducing greatly

of the revenue of the foreign medicine companies.
 

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The military junta of the Thailand has been reputated incompetant.
(use the verb judged)
But now the Thailand junta is recognized world-widely as it attacks the
(worldwide is already an adverb, no need for ly suffix)
foreign major medicine-manufacturing companies like Merck, Sanofi-Aventis,

and Bristol-Myers Squibb. Since last November, the Thailand government has

allowed to produce the duplication of two types of foreign AIDS medicines
(meaning is clear if you omit to produce)
and one of blood clot remover. It was the measure based on the ambiguous

regulation of WTO allowing government to abolish medical tenant when
(I apologize, I don't know your intended meaning "medical tenant")
public health-care is in trouble. Due to this measure, the medical fee burden

of patients has been reduced to 90% maximum. In this moment, the Thailand
(be careful of math expressions. Do you mean 100 reduced to 90 ? Say 90% of maximum. Do you mean 100 reduced to 10? Say 10% of maximum, or you can say reduced by 90%)
government is pressuring the foreign medical-manufacturing companys to

discount other medical prices. Last month, Monkol Na Songkha, the health-

care minister, warned " we are ready to act if the negotiation of medicine fee

is failed".

(if Minister Monkol spoke this way, it is better to preserve the grammar.)


The experts metaphor the medicine regulation of WTO as a nuclear weapon. (Metaphor is a noun, a comparison, use the verb compare. Replace as with to.)

Never used but the best hold-back measure. Since that regulation became in
(It is never used except as the last resort.)
effect in 2001, the medicine manufacturing companies have been avoided
(Have avoided is present perfect tense. It is used in this situation.)
the worst situation, through adopting measures, including discount of
(have avoided the worst situations through adopting measures, including...)
study the clause construction
medicine price and allowing poor countries to use more free- use period.

Thailand became the first country among mid- income countries which

practically stopped the tenants of the foreign medicine manufacturing
(The underscore is no meaning and not necessary)
companies based on the regulation of WTO.

if other mid-income countries follow the precedent of Thailand, this country ,

with 2,750 dollars GDP, will be the representative example of reducing greatly

of the revenue of the foreign medicine companies.
 
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