please,correct my mistakes

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happys82

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We provide high standards of security with nine cameras and with our well educated security guards. They responsible 24 hours for security of students and teachers,counseling services and school territory. Everything is under control in our school. Security breach anywhere out of school is determined and resolved in a short time by camera system and specialist staff.
Our service company offers all aspects of required services with the latest model comfortable cars.All of our drivers participated in psycho-course and they completed courses with 100%. All students carried in the service are secured by insurance. To learn more about the service or to submit your complaints you have to contact with service bureaus of our school.
 

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We provide high standards of security with nine CCTV cameras and with our [STRIKE]well educated[/STRIKE] highly trained security guards. They are responsible, 24 hours a day, for the security of students and teachers, counselling services and the school [STRIKE]territory[/STRIKE] grounds. Everything is under control [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] at our school. Any security breach [STRIKE]anywhere[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]out of[/STRIKE] outside the (?) school is [STRIKE]determined[/STRIKE] identified and resolved [STRIKE]in a short time[/STRIKE] quickly by the camera system and our specialist staff.

Our service company offers [STRIKE]all aspects of required[/STRIKE]
a full service with the latest model comfortable cars. All [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] our drivers [STRIKE]participated[/STRIKE] have undergone [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] psycho-course - I'm not sure what you mean. Perhaps a psychiatric evaluation? and they completed the courses with passmarks of 100%. All students [STRIKE]carried in the service[/STRIKE] travelling as passengers in our cars are [STRIKE]secured[/STRIKE] covered by insurance. To learn more about the service or to submit [STRIKE]your[/STRIKE] any complaints, [STRIKE]you have to[/STRIKE] please contact [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] the service bureaus [STRIKE]of [/STRIKE] at our school.

My suggestions are above.
 
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