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please help me correct the grammar in this essay.

Comparing between Franklin and Jefferson

Franklin and Jefferson had many things in common. For example, both of them have helped to write the declaration of independence. Also, Franklin has found a university, and Jefferson has, too. Another similarity between Franklin and Jefferson was they were ambassador to France. In addition, Franklin and Jefferson were both important men in American Revolution. Also, Franklin was inventor and philosopher, and so was Jefferson.
 

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aaa1000 said:
Comparing between Franklin and Jefferson

Delete "between" there.

aaa1000 said:
Franklin and Jefferson had many things in common.

That''s good.

aaa1000 said:
For example, both of them have helped to write the declaration of independence.

Delete "have" there.

aaa1000 said:
Also, Franklin has found a university, and Jefferson has, too.

No, you can't use present or present perfect. Use the past tense. Also, the word is founded.

aaa1000 said:
Another similarity between Franklin and Jefferson was they were ambassador to France.

They were both ambassadors to France.

aaa1000 said:
In addition, Franklin and Jefferson were both important men in American Revolution.

What's that sentence missing?

aaa1000 said:
Also, Franklin was inventor and philosopher, and so was Jefferson.

Benjamin Franklin was an inventor and philospher, as was Thomas Jefferson.
 
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