Plz help...

[sayla]

I have written a lots of version on this email, but i am still rewriting it. Hopefully, i do not annoy you guys much. I only know practice makes it perfect.

Here is my another version.

"I am writing this email to seeking more helps my English.

I am a graduate and i find that my writing is still creating me quite many obstacles. I am writing unclear statement and i still unnotice common grammatical mistakes. They could possibly block me to write better English in future job fields.

I know that ESOL department offers English courses.

I would appreciate if you could guide me in the right path for what courses to help my situation or if you tell me that anyone in the department will be able to advise me."

I am curious what i should add into each sentence, what mistakes i am making and what to do to aviod it.

 

[tedtmc]

G'day sayla
I'd say keep practising and you'll be fine. It's easier for you to do that since you are based in an English-speaking country.


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I know that ESOL department offers English courses.

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