proofread

Status
Not open for further replies.

peter123

Senior Member
Joined
Sep 13, 2007
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Arabic
Home Country
Malaysia
Current Location
Hong Kong
Hi there,
can you proofread this sentence?

As online possibilities grow, the scope for harm also increases. Virtual bonds will further alienate humans physically from each other.

Thanks
pete
 

jamiep

Member
Joined
Nov 16, 2007
Member Type
English Teacher
Native Language
British English
Home Country
Scotland
Current Location
Thailand
Grammatically it looks fine but you could change it slightly to "further physically alienate..."

What do you mean by "virtual bonds"?
 

peter123

Senior Member
Joined
Sep 13, 2007
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Arabic
Home Country
Malaysia
Current Location
Hong Kong
Hi there,

I don't understand what 'virtual bonds' is either. I think the writer wanted to mean the connection between people through internet but the bonds are not real ones, but virtual (through internet). Am I correct? OR any words to replace 'virtual bonds'?

thanks
pete
 

jamiep

Member
Joined
Nov 16, 2007
Member Type
English Teacher
Native Language
British English
Home Country
Scotland
Current Location
Thailand
That makes sense and is probably a good choice of words. Virtual is a common word for things on the internet like virtual reality. It looks real but it's not.
 
Status
Not open for further replies.
Top