proofreading

[peter123]

Hi there,
Could you proofread?
Reading can be very relaxing. People can read as relaxingly as the way they play ball games.


Thanks
pete

 

[David L.]

Reading can be very relaxing.
correct
People can read as relaxingly as the way they play ball games.
I think I may have read, probably in some advert, about 'our relaxingly soft' mattresses or something, but I suspect it is a contrived word - that is, it doesn't exist. I'm afraid the construction "as the way" doesn't fit here either, so the whole sentence needs rewording . Do you want to try to redraft the sentence, using 'relax' instead of 'relaxingly'?

 

[peter123]

Hi there,
Thanks a lot.

Is this too clumsy?

People will feel relaxed while reading just as the relaxation they will obtain while playing ball games.

pete

 

[susiedqq]

People will feel just as relaxed reading as when they play ball games.

(Perhaps reading and playing card games, two non-physical activities, are more similar.)