monsterjazzlicks
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RE: Parallelism Question
Hi folks,
I have been trying to write an introduction to a short story and have recently hit a brick wall.
I am trying to describe the fact that four convicts (two white and two black) are sitting "abreast" in the prison chapel (under the supervision of two guards). I will give you the entire paragraph for the sake of 'context':
Have I expressed this correctly, please?
I believe "A pair of white cons...a pair of black cons" uses the device 'parallelism' (although I may be wrong)? Personally, I feel it reads OK, however I am not sure if the second "cons" is required - although I am a fan of repetition!
Many thanks in advance for any kind assistance offered here.
Best,
Paul
Hi folks,
I have been trying to write an introduction to a short story and have recently hit a brick wall.
I am trying to describe the fact that four convicts (two white and two black) are sitting "abreast" in the prison chapel (under the supervision of two guards). I will give you the entire paragraph for the sake of 'context':
"Today, there were four fully time-served canaries chirping with much eagerness for the outside world - ‘Free-as-a-bird!’ was the unanimous word. A pair of white cons sitting abreast to a pair of black cons, flanked by only two officers."
Have I expressed this correctly, please?
I believe "A pair of white cons...a pair of black cons" uses the device 'parallelism' (although I may be wrong)? Personally, I feel it reads OK, however I am not sure if the second "cons" is required - although I am a fan of repetition!
Many thanks in advance for any kind assistance offered here.
Best,
Paul
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