Sorry for wanting help again, teachers! Please advise...:'(

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Helped Wanted

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Sentence A:
When I was a little girl, I already loved painting and drawing, so I made up my mind to be a fashion designer in the future.


Sentence B:
Until now, I still remember an old song my mother had always sung to me when I was small.


Please help correct them if there's any mistakes. Thanks again! T_T
 

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Re: Sorry for wanting help again, teachers! Please advise...

Helped Wanted said:
Sentence A:
When I was a little girl, I already loved painting and drawing, so I made up my mind to be a fashion designer in the future.

This one is almost perfect, except that I would suggest the following small changes (note that I removed the word already):

When I was a little girl, I loved painting and drawing, so I made up my mind to become a fashion designer in the future.

Helped Wanted said:
Sentence B:
Until now, I still remember an old song my mother had always sung to me when I was small.

This one is also almost correct, except that I don't think you need the words "Until now,".

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Good job, Red!

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[Edited for punctuation.]
 
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