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[Mina.Gh]

Hi it is the first time I want use this site, I need you to help me correct my essay and help me to do better in writing and speaking!
I am not sure it would be work or not, but I want send the assay, actually it is not for a writing skill, it is what I speak for speaking questions but I write it and I want your help to correct it.
in 1 minute I talk about my best place for rest:
"I am living in dormitory far from my home and my parents. When I want to rest and specialy want to talk about my problem I go to Goa. Inside my mothers hung is the best place for me to rest and relax to talk about my problems. After that we go out for a walk, it does not important where, when and how much time we want to walk, just go out to become relax."
I note a gain actually it is lecture for speaking not a passage of writing
correct my speaking and all of this post please
thank you so much

 

[emsr2d2]

Hi, it is the first time I [STRIKE]want [/STRIKE] have used this site. I need you to help me correct my essay and help me to do better in writing and speaking!

I am not sure [STRIKE]it would be[/STRIKE] if this will work or not, but I want to send the essay. Actually it is not for a writing skill, it is what I speak for speaking questions (I don't know what you mean by this) but I [STRIKE]write[/STRIKE] have written it and I want your help to correct it.

[STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] I have one minute to talk about my [STRIKE]best[/STRIKE] favourite place for rest:

"I am living in a dormitory far from my home and my parents. When I want to rest and [STRIKE]specialy[/STRIKE] especially when I want to talk about my problems, I go to Goa. Inside my mother's hung (do you mean some kind of house?) is the best place for me to rest, [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] relax [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] and talk about my problems. After that, we go out for a walk, it does not [STRIKE]important[/STRIKE] matter where, when [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] or for how [STRIKE]much time[/STRIKE] long we want to walk, we just go out to relax."

[STRIKE]I[/STRIKE] Please note again that actually it is a lecture for speaking, not a passage of writing.

Please correct [STRIKE]my speaking[/STRIKE] the passage and [STRIKE]all[/STRIKE] the rest of this post.

Thank you so much.

Please see my amendments marked above. I have amended capitalisation and punctuation even though the piece is to be spoken, so that you can note how to do them correctly when writing.

The punctuation will also help when you read it aloud. When there is a comma, you pause very briefly. This will help your audience to follow what you say and also give you a chance to breathe.

 

[Mina.Gh]

Please see my amendments marked above. I have amended capitalisation and punctuation even though the piece is to be spoken, so that you can note how to do them correctly when writing.

The punctuation will also help when you read it aloud. When there is a comma, you pause very briefly. This will help your audience to follow what you say and also give you a chance to breathe.

Thank you very much
I mean, I have to talk about that subject, "best place for rest"
but I dont know is it possible for you to listen to my recorded voice and then correct it or not, becase of that, I write it for you.
my mothers hug is not the name of a special place I mean beside my mom and between her hands, I dont know the exact expresion!
Thank you

 

[emsr2d2]

Thank you very much
I mean, I have to talk about that subject, "best place for rest"
but I dont know is it possible for you to listen to my recorded voice and then correct it or not, becase of that, I write it for you.
my mothers hug is not the name of a special place I mean beside my mom and between her hands, I dont know the exact expresion!
Thank you

Yes, I understood that you have to give a speech about "My favourite place to rest".

It's fine to write a speech down for us to check.

Ah, your mother's "hug". You wrote "hung" the first time which made no sense.

In that case, I would use "In my mother's arms is the best place for me to rest".