[Grammar] Ted smashed the pills of the hallucinogen

Nikitus

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Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"Ted entered quickly to the kitchen. He smashed the pills of the hallucinogen. Then he took it and mixed with beer in a glass."

Thanks.
 
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Swap the order of "entered" and "quickly".
Remove "to".
"The pills of the hallucinogen" isn't natural. Try "the hallucinogenic pills".
Turn sentences 2 and 3 into one sentence.
You said "pills" but then said "Then he took it". They don't agree.
You need another word between "mixed" and "with".
 

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I think crushed works better than smashed.
 

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"Ted quickly entered the kitchen. He smashed the the hallucinogen pills, then he took the pills and mixed them with beer in a glass."

Are the sentences grammatically correct?

Thanks.
 

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"Ted quickly entered the kitchen. He [STRIKE]smashed[/STRIKE] crushed [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] the hallucinogenic pills, then he took the pills and mixed them with beer in a glass."

Are the sentences grammatically correct?

Thanks.

See above. You can shorten the second sentence considerably to "He crushed the hallucinogenic pills then mixed them with beer [in a glass]".
 
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There is still a double 'the' before 'hallucinogenic'.
 
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