thème: photo

[hela]

Chers profs, bonsoir

Que pensez-vous me mes traductions, SVP?

Sur cette photo, on peut voir au premier plan une jeune fille, qui a environ 16 ans. Elle a une peau mate et de longs cheveux bruns. D'ailleurs elle semble être musulmane. De plus elle joue avec un ballon de football dans un jardin. Cependant elle n'est pas habillée en tenue de sport. En effet elle porte des vêtements amples et de couleur bleu avec des motifs, ainsi que des chaussures de sports blanches. Au second plan on peut voir une haie acollée à une cabane verte ainsi qu'une maison. Cette maison a une façade blanche avec deux fenêtres et un toit en brique. De plus, nous pouvons dire que la scène se déroule en été parce que le soleil brille, le ciel est bleu, l'herbe est verte et la fille porte des habits légers.

On this photo, we can see in the foreground a girl who is approximately 16. She has a dark skin and long brown hair. Besides, she seems to be Moslem. Furthermore, she plays with a soccer ball (AE) / football (BE ?) in a garden. However, she is not dressed in sports gear. Indeed, she is wearing ample / loose (?) blue clothes with patterns (?), as well as white sport shoes. In the background we can see a hedge adjoining a green hut and a house. This house has a white facade with two windows and a brick roof. In addition, we can say that the scene takes place in summer because the sun is shining, the sky is blue, the grass is green and the girl is wearing light clothes.


Au voleur!
Cet incident est vraiment arrivé il y a quelques années.
Un samedi matin, dans une petite ville anglaise, un homme est entré dans un magasin de chaussures. Pendant quelques minutes il examina soigneusement des santiags. Ensuite, il posa ses baskets sales et usagées sur le plancher et quitta le magasin. Il avait alors de nouveaux et chics santiags à ses pieds. Heureusement le vendeur vit immédiatement ce qui se passait et appela la police. Ils attrapèrent bientôt le voleur parce qu'il se déplaçait trop lentement. Il ne pouvait pas courir rapidement dans deux chaussures du pied droit!

Stop Thief
This incident actually happened a few years ago.
One Saturday morning, in a small English town, a man entered a shoe shop. For a few minutes he carefully inspected some cowboy boots. Then he put his dirty old trainers on the floor and left the shop. He now had some smart new cowboy boots on his feet. Luckily, the assistant saw immediately what was happening and rang / called the police. They soon caught the thief because he was moving too slowy. He couldn't run very fast in two right-foot shoes.

Merci beaucoup.
Cordialement,
Hela

 

[Anglika]

Chers profs, bonsoir

Que pensez-vous me mes traductions, SVP?

Sur cette photo, on peut voir au premier plan une jeune fille, qui a environ 16 ans. Elle a une peau mate et de longs cheveux bruns. D'ailleurs elle semble être musulmane. De plus elle joue avec un ballon de football dans un jardin. Cependant elle n'est pas habillée en tenue de sport. En effet elle porte des vêtements amples et de couleur bleu avec des motifs, ainsi que des chaussures de sports blanches. Au second plan on peut voir une haie acollée à une cabane verte ainsi qu'une maison. Cette maison a une façade blanche avec deux fenêtres et un toit en brique. De plus, nous pouvons dire que la scène se déroule en été parce que le soleil brille, le ciel est bleu, l'herbe est verte et la fille porte des habits légers.

On this photo, we can see in the foreground a girl who is approximately 16. She has a dark skin and long brown hair. Besides, she seems to be Moslem. Furthermore, she plays with a soccer ball (AE) / football (BE ?):tick: you can use either in a garden. However, she is not dressed in sports gear. Indeed, she is wearing ample / loose (?) blue clothes with patterns (?),loose-fitting clothes in blue with patterns as well as white sport shoes. In the background we can see a hedge adjoining a green hut and a house. This house has a white facade with two windows and a brick roof.tiled roof In addition, we can say that the scene takes place in summer because the sun is shining, the sky is blue, the grass is green and the girl is wearing light clothes.


Au voleur!
Cet incident est vraiment arrivé il y a quelques années.
Un samedi matin, dans une petite ville anglaise, un homme est entré dans un magasin de chaussures. Pendant quelques minutes il examina soigneusement des santiags. Ensuite, il posa ses baskets sales et usagées sur le plancher et quitta le magasin. Il avait alors de nouveaux et chics santiags à ses pieds. Heureusement le vendeur vit immédiatement ce qui se passait et appela la police. Ils attrapèrent bientôt le voleur parce qu'il se déplaçait trop lentement. Il ne pouvait pas courir rapidement dans deux chaussures du pied droit!

Stop Thief
This incident actually happened a few years ago.
One Saturday morning, in a small English town, a man entered a shoe shop. For a few minutes he carefully inspected some cowboy boots. Then he put his dirty old trainers on the floor and left the shop. He now had some smart new cowboy boots on his feet. Luckily, the assistant saw immediately what was happening and rang / called [either is fine] the police. They soon caught the thief because he was moving too slowy. He couldn't run very fast in two right-foot shoes.:lol:

Merci beaucoup.
Cordialement,
Hela

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[banderas]

How about "in the photo" instead of "on the photo"?

 

[hela]

Hello Anglika,

Is it possible to use the word "right-footed" at the end of the second text?

Would you please have a look at this one too?

Autrefois, il disait qu'il voulait être acteur. Il n'avait jamais enregistré de chanson jusqu'à ce qu'il rencontre ce producteur de télévision. Depuis lors, il est devenu une star. Il a déjà vendu deux cent mille disques. Il est le premier chanteur en solo qui a / ait (?) jamais vendu tant de disques avec une seule chanson. Il dit qu'il continuera jusqu'à ce qu'il ait vendu un million de disques.
Il a déclaré récemment: « J'ai toujours voulu être célèbre, et cela depuis mon enfance.»

He used to say that he wanted to be an actor. He had never recorded a song until he met this TV producer. Since then, he has become a star. He has already sold two hundred thousand records. He is the first solo artist to have ever sold so many records with just one song. He says he will go on until he has sold one million records.
He recently made an announcement :« I have always wanted to be famous since I was a child.»

Thanks a million

 

[Anglika]

Hello Anglika,

Is it possible to use the word "right-footed" at the end of the second text? You can, but "right-foot shoes" seems better to me.

Would you please have a look at this one too?

Autrefois, il disait qu'il voulait être acteur. Il n'avait jamais enregistré de chanson jusqu'à ce qu'il rencontre ce producteur de télévision. Depuis lors, il est devenu une star. Il a déjà vendu deux cent mille disques. Il est le premier chanteur en solo qui a / ait (?) jamais vendu tant de disques avec une seule chanson. Il dit qu'il continuera jusqu'à ce qu'il ait vendu un million de disques.
Il a déclaré récemment: « J'ai toujours voulu être célèbre, et cela depuis mon enfance.»

He used to say that he wanted to be an actor. He had never recorded a song until he met this TV producer. Since then, he has become a star. He has already sold two hundred thousand records. He is the first solo artist ever to have sold so many records with just one song. He says he will go on until he has sold one million records.
He recently made an announcement,« I have always wanted to be famous since I was a child.» "Ever since I was a child, I have wanted to be famous" is more colloquially likely.

Thanks a million

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[hela]

Good morning, Anglika

I made some changes to one of the text above, would you please tell me if the tenses are right this time?

On this photo, we can see in the foreground a girl who is approximately 16. She has a dark skin and long brown hair. Besides, she seems to be Moslem. Furthermore, she is playing with a soccer ball/ football in a garden. However, she is not dressed in sports gear. Indeed, she is wearing loose-fitting clothes in blue with patterns as well as white sport shoes. In the background we can see a hedge adjoining a green hut and a house. This house has a white facade with two windows and a tiled roof. In addition, we can say that the scene is taking place in (the ?) summer because the sun is shining, the sky is blue, the grass is green and the girl is wearing light clothes.

All the best

 

[BobK]

In this photo

Moslem - fine; if the photo was black and white, you might see the word Muslim (now archaic, but still in use within living memory). But if you can see the colour of the grass and the sky, it must be a colour photo!

'with patterns' might well be 'with sports logos' (depending on the pattern)

Au Voleur: bravo;-):up: (we often say 'with two right shoes' or even 'two right-hand shoes', or maybe 'with shoes on the wrong feet' [changing the sense a bit]).

b

 

[banderas]

In this photo

b

Yes, this is what I suggested in this thread earlier.
In this photo, in this picture but oddly enough...on this postcard;-)

 

[Anglika]

Good morning, Anglika

I made some changes to one of the text above, would you please tell me if the tenses are right this time?

On this photo, we can see in the foreground a girl who is approximately 16. She has a dark skin and long brown hair. Besides, she seems to be Moslem. Furthermore, she is playing with a soccer ball/ football in a garden. However, she is not dressed in sports gear. Indeed, she is wearing loose-fitting clothes in blue with patterns as well as white sport shoes. In the background we can see a hedge adjoining a green hut and a house. This house has a white facade with two windows and a tiled roof. In addition, we can say that the scene is taking place in (the ?) summer because the sun is shining, the sky is blue, the grass is green and the girl is wearing light clothes.

All the best

It's fine, apart from changes to "In this photo"; "she has dark skin..."; "we can say that it is summer...".

The tenses are ok.